Peer 2 Critique: Addressing First Writing Sample(s) & Presence

A Critique of Lisa's Writing Sample(s):

I really liked reading Lisa's posts, revealing something new about the writer. I even think now I understand the meaning behind the blog name. The writer's post: 'Still down and Out (temporarily in Westchester) was a humbling piece, because I think the contents of the post is something we all share in common at some level or another. Furthermore, I appreciated the writer's candid reflection of the negative impact the economy's downfall has had on her. This personal account conveys characteristics of resilience as well as perseverance during a much difficult time for her and so many others.

Besides liking the writer's stick figure self representation, I thought the post: 'Hello World, It's Me Again' was a fun read. I liked how she created a list of things about herself. The list shows her sense of humor. I was impressed with her major in college was Political Science. I took only one political science course in college and I loved it, but it also slightly intimidated me. I think it was because most of the class were a Political Science major and many just seemed so confident in everything they said.

I have always attributed trivia to being quick wit, which I've always wanted to be good at. I attribute this shortcoming I have with the fact that I had to watch Jepordy almost every night growing up since it was my Dad's favorite show. He always seemed to yell out the right answers before Alex Trabeck even finished reading, and anyone else had the chance to answer. To say the least I think it's affected my speed for recall. I bet the writer loves to watch: Cash Cab (a fun trivia show).

I thought the writer's style is clear and concise. The only suggestion is to just make sure to do a quick skim through before submitting. I just noticed some typos that's all.

Presence:

Lisa's online persona has an element of realism, with a genuine vibe to it. I sense she is someone who is well rounded and also well grounded for that matter. I believe a lot of people will relate to her work because her content she chooses to write about are easily relatable to. Many people just want to be understood and know they're not alone in what they experience. Identifying with your audience is the foundation for establish trust between you and your audience. This is the feeling I get after reading some of Lisa's writings.